Stevie writes long lyrics (Sara and such) and Now I have written mine!!

[Musicman408]

So this is the last song I wrote, and really it is a super song in length. I thought I would post it because I saw a thread on 7 wonders that was talking about how most of Stevie's songs are really long and have to get cut back, so immediately I though of this baby. Feel free to tell me what you think about it. Good or bad.

Verse 1: I'm not going to lie anymore.

There are things that need to be said.

Words that I need to tell you face to face.

About feelings that are common place.

I don't know how you'll react,

or if you'll even care,

but seeing you pass by me,

is just too much to bare.

Chorus: I really care about you.

Though you probably can't see.

Something inside me makes me believe,

If you give me a chance,

certainly you'd see,

that I could shine for you.

It's all I want to do.

Verse 2: So I'll openly admit,

I'm shy on the surface.

Nervous to say the wrong thing.... wrong time.

I had always wondered if you'd be mine.

Now that I think of it, I'm so sick of time.

I see you move from person to person.

Never giving me a chance.

I try to be bold in my stance,

but you move right past me.

Chorus

Verse 3 If you think this is about you,

you're too foolish to see.

Through it all, I'm only being me.

I write in disguise, mystery and mayhem.

Nobody ever knows what I'm trying to say.

So why, now, am I changing me ways?

I'm not, I just thought for once you should know.

I'm talking straight to you, and there's nothing you can do.

You're close to one, then another and another.

The one now really doesn't care for you.

And yet you insist on staying the course.

You won't leave his side, no matter how hard I try.

In the middle of the room, I'd still hear from you.

But you never gave me a moment in time.

Chorus

Verse 4: So by now, you're probably out there thinking,

This is about me, this is about me.

Oh, but you see, I will never tell.

For even though I'd do anything to be by your side,

I suppose deep down,

it could never be.

I could tell you in person how I feel,

but only to be rejected.

That only means more heartache for me.

And I've had too much heartache in that sense.

So I keep it all inside.

And I write. Oh yes, I write about you.

Chorus

Verse 5: Since I don't wnat anymore heartache,

I write. I express all the words,

that I can't say.

I write in a way so you can't understand,

how much I really want to be your man.

And I'm sure I'll have plenty of questions,

but it's alright baby,

I'm doing the best that I can.

So now, back to you.

It has been many months,

yet I have gotten nowhere.

I've seen you with others, too tough to bare.

I sit at home and think about,

all of the things that I couldn't say to you.

If you could look inside my mind and heart,

you;d probably break down and cry,

because everything I do is for you.

Everything I write is about you.

Chorus

Verse 6: So by now, you might be feeling something.

Some sort of remorse, some sort of regret.

All I can say is this is intense.

I feel so good when I can vent.

And have people reading what I write,

and thing :he's so right".

I'm told by many that I'm "cute, nice sweet",

and yet I always manage to get beat.

It it's for reasons I can't help,

that's the reason my heart melts.

I know I could offer you more than anyone,

and yet some how no emotion forms for you.

What will you saw when I see you again?

Wil you go back to the red velvet mornings,

and the nice little thins you used to say to me?

I guess I'll have to wait and see.

Chorus

Verse 7: I love to write,

and make people forget time.

What's even better is when they try to gigure out,

what it is I'm trying to say.

It's like I'm playing a game.

I write, you read and then wonder.

Never before have I taken such time,

to create a world of rhythm and rhyme.

Again, its all for you,

and I'm a fool, what can I do.

I really only am a fool for you.

Do you feel this now?

Oh yes, do you feel this now?

Chorus

Verse 8: I've gone too long without someone,

and I don't wanna wait anymore.

I thought he was my friend,

but now he's making you break my heart.

Soon, you'll be together,

by choice or not,

but regardless too much time will be spent

with you two together, and I'm afraid

he'll feel the spark,

its enough to break my heart.

So I'm saying one last good-bye.

Even though this flame won't die.

I know deep down I tried, yet you couldn't see.

And even though I say good-bye my door is always open.

And when you come knocking on my front door,

you'll come calling me home.

Chorus

Vamp: So what will happen with you?

What is it that you're gonna do?

I can't help but say oh well.

I've opened up with everything now.

There's nothing left to hide,

and yet tomorrow when I walk out the door,

all you'll say is good-bye.

But now I understand, you could never love me.

It is just too easy to see.

So how does it feel to have a song about you?

Does it make you want to cry,

for the calmest reasons why?

Oh I'll never know. Oh I'll never know.

Yes I'll never know. I care for you, but it's through.

I care for you but and it's true. Oh yes I do.



So I have posted this song, as well as many others, on my myspace page and have encouraged my friends to read it which is a lot because the subject of ALL of the songs posted is one of my friends and she is in my top 8 and all of that. And I think she has no idea that they are about her. In fact I don't even know if she has read them, but that is her loss.

Hope you all have a great weekend,


Much Love,
Ethan

[vermicious knid]

[Musicman408]

Originally Posted by vermicious knid

Um yeah, if you don't like what I have to say, you don't have to say anything. Obviously you have too much time on your hand if you are doing that kind of thing. I'd like to see you spill your guts for all of your peers to see, and see what you'd think about that........

[RockALittle250]

Originally Posted by Musicman408

Um yeah, if you don't like what I have to say, you don't have to say anything. Obviously you have too much time on your hand if you are doing that kind of thing. I'd like to see you spill your guts for all of your peers to see, and see what you'd think about that........

Wow, his first post which didn't end with "Much Love, Ethan"

[DrummerDeanna]

Wow..there is so not a call for you guys to be this rude...I can't even believe how cruel that was!

Ethan is young...he just tried to share something and like he said, if you don't have something nice to say - say nothing.

I think the picture was overkill - and very rude

[DrummerDeanna]

Ethan...do you write music too or just the lyrics?

And I think this is a good start - but it's a bit long...there are some verses that could probably be shortened and/or cut to really make it bang a bit more...just some constructive criticism

[Phoenix]

Thanks for sharing Eathan.I think your on your way to a workable song. The unfriendly post was a bit too harsh. If there is a nex time, maybe share in the "chit chat" forum.

[Musicman408]

Originally Posted by DrummerDeanna

Ethan...do you write music too or just the lyrics?

And I think this is a good start - but it's a bit long...there are some verses that could probably be shortened and/or cut to really make it bang a bit more...just some constructive criticism

Thanks Deanna. Most of my songs are MUCH shorter, but I wanted for once to just write this long epic thing that kind of spills out all of my guts at once. I DO write music in addition to just the lyrics, and I supposedly am in a band at the moment, we just haven't gotten together to officially play, although we have done some work before, and we work well.

I have some more of my newest lyrics on my totally Stevie Pimped out Myspace page, so if you want to add me, fell free. Again, thanks for the compliment, I really appreciate it.....

Much Love to you and Phoenix,
Ethan

[xdreamsunwindx]

Originally Posted by vermicious knid

[jannieC]

Ethan, do you realize that some of these lyrics are almost direct quotes from Stevie songs? I think it's cool that you use her as inspiration, but you might need to be careful about that.

[RockALittle250]

You've pretty much taken the lyrics and concepts of Stevie songs, and just re-worded most of it...not a good thing.

[irishgrl]

Originally Posted by RockALittle250

You've pretty much taken the lyrics and concepts of Stevie songs, and just re-worded most of it...not a good thing.

Im curious, since some people seem to think Stevie has the lock on song topics, which of her songs did Ethan "copy" and can anyone really say that there isnt another song out there by another artist that hasnt dealt with that topic or used similar words?

better yet, lets see what people think Ethan is actually "borrowing" from Stevie. I noticed this:
Its alright baby, Im doing the best that I can

anything else? Im not as savvy about Stevie lyrics as some of you so I'd appreciate a heads up....

[nix4life]

Originally Posted by Musicman408

In the middle of the room, I'd still hear from you.

What will you saw when I see you again?

Wil you go back to the red velvet mornings,

And when you come knocking on my front door,

you'll come calling me home.

here are just a few that i spotted:
[in the middle of my room - i did not hear from you]

[when i see you again . . . will it be the same}

[so i'm back - to the velvet / take your violet and blue mornings with you]


[baby you come knocking on my front door]
equally borrowing from petty technically

[when you build your house - call me - home]

and i bet we could trace them back to someone else but hopefully stevie isn't using the same person's stuff all in one song

doing it once is a tribute maybe?
twice a little dodgy
but five or so overlaps makes it a co-written song

u don't mind sharing the royalties with stevie do you ethan?
but if the dixie chicks ever cover it and make it huge you will be sorry lol

[Für Elise]

Ive been writing up a few lyrics myself and I thought this would be the right place to post them. I'l like to know what you think

I dont know just where Im going
but Im gonna try for the kingdom if I can
cause it makes me feel like Im a man
when I put a spike into my vein
and Ill tell ya things arent quite the same
when Im rushing on my run
and I feel just like jesus son
and I guess that I just dont know
and I guess that I just dont know

I have made the big decision
Im gonna try to nullify my life
cause when the blood begins to flow
when it shoots up the droppers neck
when Im closing in on death
and you cant help me not you guys
and all you sweet girls with all your sweet talk
you can all go take a walk
and I guess that I just dont know
and I guess that I just dont know

I wish that I was born a thousand years ago
I wish that Id sail the darkened seas
on a great big clipper ship
gGoing from this land here to that
in a sailors suit and cap
away from the big city
where a man can not be free
of all of the evils of this town
and of himself and those around
oh and I guess that I just dont know
oh and I guess that I just dont know

hHeroin be the death of me
heroin its my wife and its my life
because a mainer to my vein
leads to a center in my head
and then Im better off and dead
because when the smack begins to flow
I really dont care anymore
about all the jimjims in this town
and all the politicians makin crazy sounds
And everybody puttin everybody else down
and all the dead bodies piled up in mounds

cause when the smack begins to flow
tthen I really dont care anymore
ah when the heroin is in my blood
and that blood is in my head
then thank God that Im as good as dead
then thank your God that Im not aware
and thank God that I just dont care
and I guess I just dont know
and I guess I just dont know

[carrie721]

Originally Posted by Für Elise

Ive been writing up a few lyrics myself and I thought this would be the right place to post them. I'l like to know what you think

thanks for bringing up this long-dead thread just to post some velvet underground lyrics.