How much of a cop-out is it... - Page 3

GODDESS6 · #31 01-09-2006, 01:17 PM

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Originally Posted by Miss Vicky

I tried that... but still got nothing.

Here's the last paragraph; any thoughts?

He saw his hand reach out again, saw it pushing open still another door. Exposing for his bloodshot eyes the sight of a nude form, resting silent and nearly motionless atop black sheets. The skin of this form was dark and stretched across a muscular frame that, even in repose, emitted an ominous air of masculinity. Still Jordan felt nothing. He eased his own slender frame beside Primo and there he lie awake. His body still cold, still shivering. His mind blank, numb with exhaustion.

god that is gorgeous, i wanna read all of it!!!~ & i love "Jordan"...that is my brothers name~ well done miss vicky~

SuzeQuze · #32 01-09-2006, 05:06 PM

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Originally Posted by eclipse

how about a simple....
Black Sheets

evokes a curious mind...
what about black sheets? Are they a group of papers? on a bed? Used as a blind?
The title Black Sheets would make me stop to check out your book

But that is just me

Just a thought...
eclipse

I like this idea. It would allow for an eye-catching cover too! Something simple that won't take the mind long to process so you can quickly grab the potential reader's attention!

Miss Vicky · #33 01-09-2006, 10:44 PM

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Originally Posted by GODDESS6

god that is gorgeous, i wanna read all of it!!!~ & i love "Jordan"...that is my brothers name~ well done miss vicky~

Thanks. I'm really proud of it, but I'm also sick of the sight of it after five years of work.

I wasn't kidding when I said that I am my favorite writer in the Proust Questionaire thread.

Miss Vicky · #34 01-12-2006, 08:53 AM

Well, I just got feedback from the other person whom I'd given a copy of the book to...

And now I feel bad. He hated the ending (because he hates the character of Primo, but then the reader is supposed to hate Primo), and he said that the darkness of the book literally gave him a nightmare.

He did, however, have some suggestions for the title:

(Not An) Act of Love
Gone
No Sanctuary

Of these three, I really like No Sanctuary but I also found the suggestion of Four Square intriguing.

Decisions, decisions...

P.S.

Thanks to everyone for all their wonderful suggestions.

bretonbanquet · #35 01-12-2006, 09:14 AM

Good luck with it!

I'd say that calling it "Jordan" is a cop-out, it screams lack of imagination. "Four Square" is my favourite of those that people mentioned. I'm writing a novel myself, and the idea for the working title came from a Mac tune... although an obscure one. Don't call your book "Rumours" for God's sake!

Miss Vicky · #36 01-12-2006, 09:56 AM

Well crap...

It turns out that several writers thought that No Sanctuary was a good title for a book. I just did a search on Amazon and there are at least five books with that title. Sigh.

skcin · #37 01-12-2006, 10:47 AM

Web of Lives

Connect Four

No Light

Cheesy?

melly · #38 01-12-2006, 12:23 PM

Looking for... [whatever he's looking for] ?? or The Chase...

You want a simple title, or a wierd one? You could step back a bit and think of something that may not seem obvious... I like the title "The Catcher In The Rye" because it seems unrelated to the actual story... If it had been called "Holden".. hmmm.

Hard to suggest without having read it

irishgrl · #39 01-12-2006, 12:28 PM

Running in Place?

Chaos Theory?

From Dark to Light?

Jordan's Crossing? (I know, I couldnt resist!)

I think I'd need a bit more of a summary (along with some excerpts that captured the flavor of the story) to be able to come up with something really good...........

Miss Vicky · #40 01-12-2006, 11:03 PM

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Originally Posted by bretonbanquet

I'm writing a novel myself, and the idea for the working title came from a Mac tune... although an obscure one. Don't call your book "Rumours" for God's sake!

So, what's yours about?

seeker007nmss · #41 01-12-2006, 11:34 PM

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Originally Posted by Miss Vicky

Well, I just got feedback from the other person whom I'd given a copy of the book to...

And now I feel bad. He hated the ending (because he hates the character of Primo, but then the reader is supposed to hate Primo), and he said that the darkness of the book literally gave him a nightmare.

He did, however, have some suggestions for the title:

(Not An) Act of Love
Gone
No Sanctuary

Of these three, I really like No Sanctuary but I also found the suggestion of Four Square intriguing.

Decisions, decisions...

P.S.

Thanks to everyone for all their wonderful suggestions.

If you decide on "four square" can I get an autographed copy WHEN (not if) you get it published? I have a shelf of autographed books and want to add it to the collection.

Miss Vicky · #42 01-13-2006, 08:36 AM

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Originally Posted by seeker007nmss

If you decide on "four square" can I get an autographed copy WHEN (not if) you get it published? I have a shelf of autographed books and want to add it to the collection.

Sure.

bretonbanquet · #43 01-13-2006, 07:39 PM

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Originally Posted by Miss Vicky

So, what's yours about?

It's still in relatively early stages but it's about man's abuse of the planet and how man is ultimately punished for it. I'm trying not to make it into some kind of biblical epic, but it's developing a mind of its own

Miss Vicky · #44 01-13-2006, 08:13 PM

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Originally Posted by bretonbanquet

It's still in relatively early stages but it's about man's abuse of the planet and how man is ultimately punished for it. I'm trying not to make it into some kind of biblical epic, but it's developing a mind of its own

I see. I'm not good at conveying messages with my work. I just come up with stories that are interesting to me and that serve no purpose other than to entertain. I'm shallow that way, I guess.

BTW, I chose a title to put on my Copyright registration: Erratic Circles

It sounds a little strange, I know, but I think it makes sense for the book. As much as I liked most of the suggestions put forth, none quite seemed to fit - though it's still too early to say if I'm going to ultimately use that title when I go to publish.

I sent off my application today. Now comes the waiting. The first time I registered for a copyright it took almost an entire year before I got my certificate. Ugh.

bretonbanquet · #45 01-14-2006, 12:28 PM

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Originally Posted by Miss Vicky

I see. I'm not good at conveying messages with my work. I just come up with stories that are interesting to me and that serve no purpose other than to entertain. I'm shallow that way, I guess.

BTW, I chose a title to put on my Copyright registration: Erratic Circles

It sounds a little strange, I know, but I think it makes sense for the book. As much as I liked most of the suggestions put forth, none quite seemed to fit - though it's still too early to say if I'm going to ultimately use that title when I go to publish.

I sent off my application today. Now comes the waiting. The first time I registered for a copyright it took almost an entire year before I got my certificate. Ugh.

Not shallow at all. Stories just written to entertain are often the ones that sell zillions of copies. People can pick up their own messages anyway - not everyone wants to be preached to when they read a novel, so that's the problem I'm facing as I write mine.

That sounds like quite a good title - it should get people wondering what it's all about, and thinking about the meaning of the title as they read through the book. Anyway, like you say, you can always change your mind!