Feedback on Writing- 1st Chapter From My Novel~ Criticism Please!

[Musicman408]

I've decided instead of posting it, if you feel like reading it, feel free to PM me!

[mylittledemon]

I will read it later today, but my first piece of advice is to not publish such material in a forum like this.

It's not that I don't trust the regulars here, but there are a lot of lurkers... And frankly, you never know who might try and rip off your work. Better to be safe than sorry. ;)

[Sahara]

Would love to read it Ethan -- I'm starting to get back into writing after a long break ... send it in a PM if you don't want to post! :wavey:

[David]

I really enjoyed the first chapter, Ethan. It had some of that exquisite Belle Epoque sensibility found in Proust (the Scott-Moncrieff translation) & Madox Ford's "The Good Soldier." The unreliability of the narrative voice was a sophisticated touch, worthy of Schnitzler in "Sterben."