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Dreams, My Version
Hi,
For Yr. 8 poetry, one of our tasks was to get a song - and strip it of its words. Next, we had to think of our own - to the same melody. This is my poem/song that I did, based on dreams. I hope you like it - I did Seven Wonders and The Chain, but they are not finished. Enjoy! Rhythm and Melody: Dreams My Song: The Post Breakup When I was a young boy, I knew the reason And now you ask me for it You used to hound me, follow me through the hall But I can still hear your voice, with the wind and snow Like when the birds fly up to cloud, And the way the crows call it, something strange And now you're gone But you're still here In my mind So this now what has come to mind, Ghostly, moonlit comes back to haunt me And now you're their in vision, blue grit fascinating Talking like a wisp of smoke, blue smoke You follow me down the hall Through eyes of glass The call of you makes me scared You know you're wrong, Crawling like a spider Don’t you feel menacing In your ghostly state Like the pine tree burns down With a ghastly lick of a flame And now its ash And now its gone Ohh, now its gone Ohh, now its Ash So this now what has come to mind, Ghostly, moonlit comes back to haunt me And now you're their in vision, blue grit fascinating Talking like a wisp of smoke, blue smoke So this now what has come to mind, Ghostly, moonlit comes back to haunt me And now you're their in vision, blue grit fascinating Talking like a wisp of smoke, blue smoke You will go x3 |
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So what did you guys think?
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I like it! But I don't like the idea of trying to read it in my head to the tune of Dreams. I know that's what you had to do, but I think that's a silly idea because it might limit what you could do with the writing...and makes me think of another song the entire time I'm trying to read yours.
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Tricky assignment, but very interesting also.
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