"Blue Letter"... my 1st short film

[mylittledemon]

Any "likes" or constructive comments would be appreciated.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=hL9chnl97NA

In the least, I know you guys will like the song at the end. It works for the vibe of the film pretty well, eh?


Cheers,

Brandon

[holidayroad]

It's definitely interesting. I like it! What I like best is that you took a minimal approach, not a long drawn out story. Only one slight comment, you should have put the name of the song in the credits. That way, if someone watching it liked it, they'd know who it's by. Actually, I think I'll post it in the comments at YouTube.

[mylittledemon]

Well, thank you! The movie original was 5 minutes. I had "Death" in the mirror during the bathroom breakdown scene... but I felt like it didn't work. After the credits are finished, I cut back to the bathroom and show Death pointing... as if "you're next" kind of thing. For some reason when I rendered it, that clip got cut off. I will have to RE-upload it.

Anyway... For reasons of telling a "good" quick story... we were required to cut it down to less than 3 minutes. So cutting 2 minutes of footage (and making the story work) was considerably difficult. I think it still works, but I am my own worst critic and will pick it apart until Kingdom Come.

[Peestie]

That was cool. Are you doing it for a job/course/hobby?

[GODDESS6]

i liked it brandon~

[vivfox]

I enjoyed your mini movie. I found one mistake though. When the guy came out of the shower and stood in front of the mirror, his hair was dry. It should have looked wet.

[mylittledemon]

Originally Posted by vivfox

I enjoyed your mini movie. I found one mistake though. When the guy came out of the shower and stood in front of the mirror, his hair was dry. It should have looked wet.

I know! The continuity issues are driving me insane. My instructors brought up the same thing when I presented the film. I said... "Well not everyone washes their hair every day."

[vivfox]

Originally Posted by mylittledemon

I know! The continuity issues are driving me insane. My instructors brought up the same thing when I presented the film. I said... "Well not everyone washes their hair every day."

Not everyone washes but everyone gets it wet. Well at least every man does.

[mylittledemon]

Originally Posted by vivfox

Not everyone washes but everyone gets it wet. Well at least every man does.

We're still talking about hair, right?

[vivfox]

Originally Posted by mylittledemon

We're still talking about hair, right?

I'm still waiting for Shane to discover this thread.

[mylittledemon]

here's the updated version

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=lf1ncfkkWNg

[mylittledemon]

And whoever's clicking "dislike"... please tell me why. That'd be nice.

[vivfox]

Originally Posted by mylittledemon

here's the updated version

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=lf1ncfkkWNg

OK, now who hangs their towel over the shower curtain while they are taking a shower? The thing would be drenched when you go to dry yourself off.

[fringed n fab]

Originally Posted by vivfox

I'm still waiting for Shane to discover this thread.

Nice video. And I wash, condition, and blowdry my hair every single day. A bitch process but I couldn't stand not to.

[BTFLCHLD]

brandon, this is your first production, right? I like it. It might have been cool to have some tear smudge Lily's name so ink spread blue on the letter...eh, whatevs. anyways, for future films, I would make a small suggestion to shorten the length of credits - one minute is a 1/3 of your video and that is wayyyyyy over for a short film.