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Originally Posted by Meowi
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Sorry Meowi! I'm not sure how this one slipped past me!
This is an excellent poem!
I'm not sure if I can really criticise it actually!
I love the overall structure - having the long paragraphs at the start during the sad reminiscence, and the shorter, repetitive paragraphs at the end during the despairing resentment of having lost the loved one. It suits the changing mood perfectly!
(I'm not sure I conveyed what I meant to properly here - it's like I can't find the most suitable words for my ideas. I can't seem to improve what I said though... I hope it makes sense!
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